
I stumbled across an article in Direct Magazine where a self-proclaimed "Makeover Maven" finds bad ads and gives them a makeover. The reason I am writing about this is because he really ruined an ad that really wasn't that bad. Guess which add above he designed. The ad on the right is what the ad looked like after the Maven had his way with it. Here are the three arguments he made in support of his ad followed by my comments about why he made the ad worse.
1. Clarify and strengthen the promise in the headline.
Well, you succeeded in making the headline longer. Unfortunately, you took all the life out of it, and now there is no connection to the image. If that wasn't bad enough, you added a subhead that successfully bores the reader before they even get to the headline. And why did you change the photography from one dominant graphic that supports the headline to three low impact shots with no connection to the text? The Maven's rational: "a young couple running through the surf doesn't really convey anything beyond 'Take the million and run.'" At least thats better than three photos that have nothing to do with the headline.
2. Sell the sizzle, not the steak.
Are you kidding me? SHOW THE STEAK! Nobody is going to stop to read a page of 8pt type explaining to me why I should buy a steak. You covered the whole page with type, and three same sized photos. Where is the white space? Where is the hierarchy. Sorry sir, but noone is going to read your ad.
3. Strengthen the interactivity.
The Maven actually makes a couple of good points here about about sending them to a Web site that tracks the success rate of the ad. The ironic thing is that if they were to take his advice about the ad, when they tracked the success of the ad through the Web address, they would realize that nobody read the ad because of how poorly it was designed.
I emailed my comments to the Makeover Maven, and I will let you know if he responds.